There is no warning rattle at the door, or perhaps Iâ€™m in too deep to hear you invade the keyhole with your key, too far gone to hear the scrape of metal against metal. Either way, Iâ€™m downÂ so deep I can barely move: I have no warning. You appear before me silently with a candle and a dark smile, holding a small metal bowl, which you set down carefully on the floor.
You circle me, examining me, clawing at me with your eyes. You tug my wrists strung behind my back, you pull my ponytail where it dangles, you run your hands down my spread legs to the shackles and bar at my ankles. You aggravate my hurts and I moan.
You enter my plane of vision and ravage the silence with a growl.
â€œIâ€™m going to use you.â€
I nod and mumble in agreement.
You slip a small knife from your pocket. You loom and cut the rope at my wrists. You let my arms fall to my sides.
You pocket your knife and snatch my hair in one hand. With your other hand you slap my face. Once, twice. A third time, and my face is stinging. I am awake now, youâ€™ve seen to that.
I blink. Your small candle casts eerie shadows around the room.
You abandon my face and travel to my shoulders, which you take firmly into your hands. I find myself at the juncture of clavicle and phalanges. I smile.
You shove me to the cold, hard stone without another word; you watch me watch you deliberately undo your pants. You watch me watch you.
At last, â€œOpen your mouth,â€ you whisper. I do, and you commence your ministrations. You push me, pull me, you fight me. You play with my breath, you take whatâ€™s yours and you steal whatâ€™s mine. I am forced out of myself. You persist at my mouth until you take matters into your own hands; your efforts culminate in a hot, wet arc that says it all.
Afterwards I am hot and wet. Afterwards my knees hurt. Afterwards I smile. I am here for your pleasure.
â€œBedtime,â€ you say not unkindly as you replace your clothing. I wait for you to make your way back up the stairs, your quiet hum echoing in the gloomy chamber like a prelude to the slam of the heavy door. The scrape of metal against metal startles me now.
When Iâ€™m sure that youâ€™re gone, I use my hands to support my weight as I flip my bound legs around to the front, a feat not so easy to accomplish. My hurts complain. I sit, naked, legs still shackled and splayed before me on the stone floor: I am a bird on a wire. I reach for the small metal dish youâ€™ve left. I am hungry and I dig into the food with my bare fingers, enjoying my sustenance.
Later, as the small candle wears down and sleep threatens, I memorize the shadows. I take note of the size and shape of the empty dish next to me on the floor. A dog bowl, I think with my last few strands of consciousness.
31 thoughts on “Ascent”
Oh, my. This is really good. You write so well on the difficult and (for me) precarious. Excellent!
Thanks so much. It does actually feel very precarious, so your compliment means a lot.
You did a wonderful job.
I do like the way that your voice occupies the space you describe. I found the telling of this story breathtaking.
Thank you. 🙂
Holy shit, Christi. I enjoy all of your writing, but this one blew me away. (pun not intended)
Thanks so much for the compliment, Twindaddy. Second person POV is very powerful. Also, I have to give credit to Maya Angelou for some of the words. Her writing is so visceral.
The dark – you do it so well.
Enjoyed this piece even if it brought back a lot of memories for me – at first I thought – I wonder if this happened to her as well?
I’m sorry for bringing back memories for you, Carol. No, this did not actually happen to me, although I am flattered that I was able to present the illusion that it did.
As always, gritty and gripping with a voice that is like no other.
That’s a huge compliment, Silverleaf!
Disturbing but very well written.
That was horrific, dark, and twisted. I loved it! Haha
Thank you, Arden!
That was twisted, horrific, and riveting. Very disturbing but well written. It flowed well. I wondered why she was there throughout and what brought her to such a nasty fate.
Good questions, Kathy! Thanks for the honest evaluation.
You write so compellingly, I was torn between aversion and the compulsion to keep reading. It proves that skillful and beautiful writing can tell a bitter and dark story without resorting to vulgarities and senseless titillation. The violence, darkness and horror was conveyed artfully. Well done!
Thank you so much for this thoughtful comment, Joanne. It is definitely a huge part of the challenge of writing for me, to say the most with the fewest, choicest words.
Dear everyone: Please burn every copy of 50 shades and replace with this story. Kthx.
Wow. Oh, wow. Thanks! Can I tweet this comment?
I’d be honored.
That’s awesome, thank you!!
Wow. So dark and so compelling. Excellent write, excellent voice, and an excellent take on the prompts!
The image of a dog dish says so much. The second person POV works well here.
Yeah, I liked the mixture of humiliation and lovable familiarity…
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